Friday, 27 October 2017

Come check out my opinion on "Should all children get pocket money".

So this is my opinion on "Should all children get pocket money"
I picked disagree because I feel like children would just waist it when your parents can be using it.
I hope you enjoy and maybe next week I will post another one of my writing

'Should all children get pocket money’

Planning: My reasons, why I agree or disagree ( you will pick only 3)
I disagree They might just want money so they can prove to people they have their parents that can use it.
Secondly Because some people just want money to buy things they don’t need.
Thirdly their parents need money to buy food/water and also pay for power, water, their house, and any other bills.


Title of your exposition
I am adamant that children should not get money!
-Start with a Rhetorical Question
-state your opinion
-give your 3 reasons why you think this
Would you like kids arguing over money? I strongly disagree because they will try bribing you to give them more money than they need. If they keep on doing jobs all your money will be gone. Since it’s all gone they won’t get payed then they won’t do jobs ever again but if you don’t give them money they will learn that you have to do them even if you don’t get money because that’s just how life works. Above that also they will spend it on things they don’t need, they can save it to prove to people they have money and lastly their parents need money to pay bills.
Point 1
Expand on your first reason. Why do you think this? Why is it important?

Firstly I powerfully disagree think that if you don’t give your children pocket money from doing jobs they will learn it’s not all about money when you're a kid. But if you do they will go to school and take their money with them to show off and make people feel sad because their not getting pocket money from doing jobs. Also they might not get any money because their parents are having trouble financially and they bring that back and make them feel sad and that they never want to come back to school ever again. Because school is suppose to be fun but when someone or  some people do that it is not nice because you don’t know what’s going on in their personal  life.
Point 2
Expand on your second reason.

Secondly I strongly think that even if your children don’t show off with their money. Maybe they don’t have money because they spent it all on lollies, fizzy drinks, pies, sausage rolls or any other junk food when you or your parents can be spending it on bills, food/water, clothes or other things you need. Also well were talking about food, when they go grocery shopping they can actually buy proper food instead of junk food. Even though if you go down town and you think well it’s alright because it’s only $1 dollar for a packet or $50 cents you can still get rotten teeth, losing money even worse diabetes because you’ve had too much sugar and you had a bad diet.
Point 3
Expand on your third reason.

Finally I valid that if you get pocket money for doing jobs your parents can be using that to pay power, water, the house you’re living in or any other bills. Did you know that if they keep giving money to you just for a job that when you get older you’ll have to do and you won’t get payed for doing. They will have no money left and you have probably spent all your money by the time your parents have ran out of money. Since that they don’t have any money you will lose everything like your house money for food/water, bed, things to do your hair, brush your teeth, trips to go places and things like that. Now you're living on the streets or maybe with someone else like a friend or and family member.
Restate your opinion and why
You might recommend something for the reader to do or think. Why should they think the same as you?
So the message I’m trying to give you is you don’t need money to be famous and you don’t need to be famous the only thing you need is your family. So I strongly think your parents should not give you pocket money for doing jobs because you never know. Because in the future things are gonna probably get more expensive than things are already are. So no more getting pocket money for doing jobs just do them without getting money.

1 comment:

  1. Hi Dakota,
    My name is Ngahuia and I go to Paihia School. I like your persuasive piece of writing about should all children get pocket money. I strongly agree with your piece of writing and I think that not all kids should earn pocket money.